My holiday
I was driving down the swerving road to the beach trees tussocks
littered the road sides a motor bike wobbled and fell my mom stopped and made
sure that he was ok we kept going to the beach I stepped on to the stone slabs
leading down to the beach I put on my life jacket and got on to the sea biscuit
and I started to go on to the top of the water I skimmed across the water and the
boat turned sharply I flew out across the water I then saw the distinctive ribbons
of the sun setting I then got pulled in to the shore I stood in the water perfectly
still not a ripple then I saw that there was a shiny silver thing in the water about
a meter away from me it vanished then I saw it again I grabbed at it I was holding
a baby snapper I put it back in to the water is swam away. I got a towel and we
drove away.
This post has a great load of ideas. There were some unfamiliar word that fit in nicely, but you could add a few more. I think that next time you defiantly need to use more punctuation, eg: full stops and commas. You may need to remember to proof-read before going straight to publishing. This was a lovely piece to read.
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