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My favorite hobbie is animals,animals have been apart of my life since I was bought home from the hospital,I am animal obsessed.I have wanted a dog since I was 3 and a horse since I was 7.My next hobbie is horse riding I absolutely love horse riding, horses are gentle giants, Mark Todd is my inspiration for horse riding and i'm on my way to being like him.I really like riding with friends soon i'm going on a riding camp with one.
By Casey
Casey, you have done really well with sentence structure and spelling. You could have added more punctuation for suspense and detail. Other than that a great piece. Well done!
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