In the middle of our Holiday we were not relaxing on a hot Sunny, Summer Beach, but the opposite we were in Paris, waking up from our sleep in Hotel Du` Nord. After Breakfast at the Hotel, of a huge Corrosion and a massive hot chocolate, we walked a long way to the Louvre Museum passing bridges were people had engraved locks locked them on and thrown away the key.
By the time we arrived there was a huge Que, I think it was so big because it was a free entry that day. Twenty minuets later we went through the security and down the escalators underneath the glass pyramid. We went straight to the Monalisa painting, there were so many people there looking at the painting. It helped being small because we went straight to the front of the crowd. We then got someone to take a photo of us standing in front of it. We looked at a few other paintings and sculptures. After we got out of the Lourve we walked to a sculpture museum which had the sculpture "the thinker", unfortunately it was closed that day, but we grabbed a quick look at ''the thinker''.
Next we walked to the Eiffel tower and waited in another huge Que. When we got to buy tickets it was nearly 1:pm. We took lots of photos and then took the big yellow elevator all the back down, we went to a cafe in another museum and had lunch. I had a crepe and a burger.
Finally we walked back to the hotel to get ready to go on a high speed train back to Geneva Switzerland then we would catch a plane back to England then we would go on another plane back to New Zealand.
I was happy to go home but I would miss this trip.
George.
George, I like the organisation and your Ideas in your piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteYou have used your organisation well by grouping and sequencing your ideas.
i do think that you need to improve on your punctuation and spelling. There were some places where you could add more punctuation in your sentences. overall it was a well written piece.
Jaymeson.